It is needless to say that girls of our age look forward to finding true love, marrying their ideal sweethearts. Yet, a complete as well as warm and fragrant family consists of several important factors. To begin with, taking the financial expenditure into account, they should marry the man who has steady incomes. Furthermore, it is necessary for them to control the daily running cost in their family. Moreover, characters are considerable significant effects if they can get along with their lovers. The most important thing is that both of them should have the same habit; otherwise, it will be problematic for them to live together. Getting marries is so important that it can not be too careful to consider over and over again.

a complete as well as warm and fragrant
ReplyDelete// a complete, warm as well as fragrant
taking the financial expenditure into account, they should marry the man who has steady incomes沒有連接詞喔!
Getting marries is so important that~
// Getting married is so important that~
最後一句真棒欸!! 現學現賣XDD
話說這是ada的夢想嗎?!
應該要再加一句 "I'm not exception"XDDDDDD
這篇比剛剛被批評很慘的那篇順暢喔~加油
ReplyDeleteideal sweethearts這裡用lovers比較好=)
ReplyDelete這篇不錯喔~
找不到甚麼錯誤~
內容也比以前充實了><
期待妳能繼續保持!!!
a complete as well as warm and fragrant 這是什麼?!
ReplyDelete好好想想吧阿達xDD
Getting married...
這兩篇都有讓我無言到唷xD!!
沒啥大錯誤耶~~
ReplyDeletebtw, 這該不會是你未來擇偶的條件吧XDDDDD
a complete --->不是名詞喔
ReplyDeletea complete as well as warm and fragrant family
通常有很多描述的形容詞時 都適用逗點連接最後再用and或是as well as
-->a complete,warm and fragrant family ~
characters are considerable significant effects 為甚麼兩個形容詞接在一起阿?
語意讓我看不懂o__o
Getting marries -->Getting married
a complete as well as warm and fragrant family
ReplyDelete-->a complete, warm as well as fragrant family
daily running cost???看不懂running?
Getting marries-->Getting married
哇~~又是一個經典
看你的文章好開心唷~
Yet, a complete as well as warm and fragrant family consists of several important factors.=>這一句有點看不懂(知識淺薄XD)
ReplyDeletethey should marry the man who has steady incomes=>這個的確很重要~不過能自己賺最好=目
Getting marries is so important that it can not be too careful to consider over and over again.=>這一句的用法我覺得不錯~
這一篇感覺有比較順暢了~加油=)))